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Mama forgive me,
I won't be coming home tonight,
It rained mortar shells while I was outside.
Tell papa I love him, and 
I'm sorry I haven't called in a while. 
I wanted to come back with a surprise, 
That college degree I've been working for, 
I got it mama, I wanted you proud. 
But I think I'll come home wrapped in a flag. 

I'm sorry mama,
I couldn’t run fast enough, 
It happened in a blink, I swear 
I couldn't react. 

There was a
 whistle and
something f
lung me off the ground.
I could hear screams aroun
And I tasted blood in my mouth. 

It really hurt mama, 
I know I cried for you, 
But no one answered, 
Only more screamed bellowed 

I'm scared, mama.
 
I want to hear your voice 
But it's getting cold and 
Another whistle is about
To hit home.  

I'm sorry mama, 
I think I lost my voice.
I can see your name
Blinking on the cracked 
Screen of my phone, 
But I'm too tired to take that call.  

I'm sorry mama,
I just need some rest
 
Once I wake up,
I promise I'll call back.  
 

I haven't written something here in months
and when I did
it's the most morbid thing i can possibly come up with. 
*cough*
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:iconjenlafayette:
JenLaFayette Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Why must you hurt me so! :noes:
But it's beautiful! Beatifically tragic! And wonderfully written :heart:
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
herhehe cuz i like making people cry lelelele 
glad you liked it 
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FallenArchetype Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Ow my heart 
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
awh :huggle: 
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Pereyga Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
"Once I wake up, I promise I'll call back."
Those last lines gave me the rest, waah T_T
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :huggle: 
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TheAmberDragon999 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2017
Wow... That is very well written. I'm impressed 0_0
well done ^^
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you :3 
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doughboycafe Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2017  Professional Writer
:c sweetheart
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle: there there 
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SenoritaBlack Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2017
Ohhhhhh God. I kinda feel like crying now...not that I will, 'cause I'm heartless ya know...and I know you're fine. But still....dang.
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle: there there love
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:iconabsolthezhang:
Absolthezhang Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2017  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I just about died... Oh my gosh you hit me drastically
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Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
sorry :p
glad you liked it
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:iconlonesomebookworm:
LonesomeBookworm Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
Absolutely heart-wrenching. I love it :happycry:
It's so good to see you writing again :)
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you
i am writing, i have a big story waiting for a beta...once i manage to get some help proof reading it, it'll be up 
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LonesomeBookworm Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017  Student Traditional Artist
I'll look forward to reading it then :D
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Embers actually. Overhauled the entire thing :giggle: 
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:iconcrystalcze:
CrystalCZE Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017
Wow, but pretty sad :(
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you =3
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AlexaXVMichaelis Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
I thought it was turning into that queen song...
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
which? :o
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AlexaXVMichaelis Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Bohemian Rhapsody. Cause you said mama and words in the song, and i sang the rest hehe.
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Sedrik-the-Blue Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Student Writer
This...is dark... ^~^
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
yush :nod: 
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:iconsedrik-the-blue:
Sedrik-the-Blue Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Student Writer
In a good way, though...I think... ^~^
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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017
this actually made me tear up man this is amazing! i hope u do more written stuff cus u have real talent 
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you, i am in the process of writing something big, i need a beta reader though lol 
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Slashh-20000 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017
I see alright i need the same to
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SerenWild Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, this is really moving. Great work!!
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconthankyousignplz:
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SerenWild Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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Stargazzer811 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017
Reminds me of a lot of songs an poetry that were written during and after WW2. The type that tell you the real side of the war, without ever showing it. Yet, you can see it in your minds eye, the horror, pain and anguish. Let that sort of thing remind those people who hate the militaries of the world that their are worse fates, and that people go through this shit on their behalf, die on their behalf, so they can have their smart phones and big macs and go to the park with their dog.
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Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
You don't need WWII..
there's syria now, this is happening daily there. 
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Stargazzer811 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017
Its happening daily everywhere mate.
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Hawkieface Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
jesus why do you insist on breaking me I stg
I adore this, despite its darkness ;;o;; and that last stanza, hooo boy, hit me hard
as always, wonderful work lovely <3
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Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
I like making people cry
Thank you, i'll call it a victory if this poem is hitting hard :D 
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Hawkieface Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
how dare
oh honey I absolutely love it <3 so you're more than welcome!
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:iconperiodicfable:
PeriodicFable Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017   Writer
Just gorgeous, good on you for getting the beautiful and sombre words out. You've also great flow here, love it!
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconthankyousignplz:
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Lugia20711 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Student Writer
very sobering and sad.
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconthankyousignplz:
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foreshadow10 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017
Goodness! It's dark and sad, but it captures the sad part of war. However, I did notice a small typo in the word flung, being spelled as fFlung, but I won't grill you on it as we all make mistakes. ^^ Please keep up the good work.
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Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't you think it's a bit pathetic and stupid to want to grill someone over one letter?
Either way,thanks for spotting it.
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foreshadow10 Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2017
Nah, I didn't mean it like that, I meant I wasn't going to be like most people and go on a full rant or treat you bad for a mistake. (Which I despise it when people do that) I was taught better than that, and I don't like to see others spouting stuff like that. As someone who typos, I know that mistakes can be made, and I sympathize. Sorry if what I said came out wrong, it wasn't my intention.
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TheBlackestBane Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
emotional. Well done!
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you
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GoldenDiva013 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Aaaahhhh.... Whyyyyy.
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:iconmythiril:
Mythiril Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
I like making people cry over poetry 
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GoldenDiva013 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
eehhhhhhhhh...
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